How to turn this into a catchy paragraph

[Plankton5165]

You guys said I could make the paragraph catchier.

I would like to know an example of a more catchy version of this paragraph:

Did you start a business but cannot make money? Let's say you made a product, which you are now trying to sell. You won't make money by just starting a business and creating the product. You need to get customers to buy a product you make no matter how good it is. But you don't even need to make a product. You can just bring converting traffic to someone else's product and therefore get paid for it.

 

[Honeybadger]

@Plankton5165
I recommend to watch this video

 

[Plankton5165]

The paragraph tries to tell the "story" part of the "hook, story, and offer".

 

[Plankton5165]

I guess I'm never gonna come up with the better paragraph. I'm just stumped.

 

[Honeybadger]

I guess I'm never gonna come up with the better paragraph. I'm just stumped.

That's not the correct attitude
Winners always find a way to win !!

 

[Plankton5165]

I'm just trying to get more help than this.

I don't tend to watch videos where I only see people's faces. Maybe if the video showed me a script of what to write.

 

[Honeybadger]

I'm just trying to get more help than this.
I don't tend to watch videos where I only see people's faces. Maybe if the video showed me a script of what to write.

If it was that easy the whole forum would be doing it
You have to put in the hours and do your research
Nobody builds a successful system without research
I have spend hundreds thousands of hours researching (and it never stops)
Landing Page Guys absolutely nail it on conversion optimization
It's insane that some dumb stupid cat channel has 100k followers, but LPG only have 2,650
Most people just want fast entertainment - you can be the one who provides it, and cashes in
Try turning on subtitles (copy + paste, then amend as you like)
You're still trying, and that's a very good signal
Keep hunting and you'll get a meal